My Progress As I Phase Through Each Phase

These last few phases have posed to be a challenge in their own way but, all came down to narrowing it down to one specific goal. To always get the point across and get straight to it. I tend to struggle with this as I want to drag out whatever I am explaining for no reason which may bore the audience. I believe learning about technical descriptions has helped me with my writing and creating new ideas when formulating my writing pieces together. I also believe that free writing also plays a role as I just write down whatever comes to mind and then just use whatever I believe is important when completing the final piece of each phase. I was able to plan out what I needed that corresponds with my writing piece. Pretty much like a draft. I just mainly focused on making my writing clear and concise, straight to the point for whoever is reading it.

During our phase 3 assignment, we drafted it out on a google doc. Specifically focusing on the abstract, our Professor noted that the abstract was involving a lot of useless sentences such as “Our app hopes to reach new heights across all sorts of platforms and gain a new audience.” The point of the abstract is to just be specific along the goals of the app, not the wishes and aspirations BASK had. The revised version would just be “BASK wants to be introduced to all sorts of audience” making that sentence more simple and concise and straight to the point. The abstract is a short paragraph explaining what is going on and such. Basically a short summary introduction. The abstract is something I worked on for Phase 3 of the project proposal and have used it as a learning experience to improve upon my future assignments. This particular part of the assignment allowed me to be more clear and concise in my future writing assignments by getting straight to the point. Such as the group presentation, we would all collaborate off of one another and just add new points with our presentation with specific new ideas instead of dragging it out by repeating what they said but, in a slightly different way. We all worked off one another’s works regardless of the many different writing styles playing a hand in this project proposal.

In regards to Phase 3, It was something that was unnatural when it came to creating a proposal in itself. We all had different ideas and different writing styles. We were all confused until we decided to narrow it down to one specific thing and that was focusing on creating an app known as BASK. We collaborated by adding all sorts of ideas to a draft and then condensing it down to those very specific ideas by narrowing it down to what we believed was best fit for creating this app. Specifically for the literature review we decided to go at it like this. The 1st  phase of articles we would find would be a specific small business that we believe would be beneficial to our app and implements the goals of BASK using small businesses to make their businesses boom while giving us the recognition as well and back it up with supporting articles. The 2nd phase would be us finding specific apps to that of BASK and finding its faults. The collaborative effort of all of us made our literature review important to our project proposal regardless of our different writing styles, still implementing the way we would write a technical description and again getting straight to the point.

Moving on for the literature review, the revisions we would make included a new app known as the “Slice app” which is something we never had in our old literature reviews. We just had to include a new app that is related to our up and coming app BASK. We  failed to provide a good analysis on some of our sources by citing why BASK is going to improve upon said issue. “With more and more small businesses being made there needs to be something so small businesses can keep up with the evolving world. The invention of an app is needed in order for small businesses, more specifically clothing brands to prosper.” This is an example of one of literature reviews towards the end. The fixed version would be “With more and more small businesses being made there needs to be something so small businesses can keep up with the evolving world. The invention of an app is needed in order for small businesses in all sorts of categories like clothing brands or restaurants”. This revision is important because we want to mention that BASK aims to have different categories and we want to mention that first and THEN mention example categories like I just did saying “restaurants or clothing brands”.

Overall during these 4 phases, I have developed my writing to mainly present the specific and important details to my audience. I’ve leaned towards a technical description writing format as my main writing style. This is due to what I believe is my career path when I go down an engineering path. I want to be able to present my ideas to my employers or have my presentations be straight to the point without confusing anyone, allowing everyone to understand.